People buy electric device more than before. Is this a positive or negative development?

In the past few decades, more and more of people
begins
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began
to purchase electric and electronic gadgets and equipment for their daily routine. Even though, these devices had certainly made a person’s life easier and quickly, there are few consequences that they have to face.
Therefore
, in my opinion, the dependence on these gadgets has had a huge negative impact towards the society and the
environment
.
First
of all,
people especially
Accept comma addition
people, especially
younger children are socially dependent on these electronic devices. These children rarely go as they prefer to stay
indoor
within a building
indoors
playing video games and surfing the social media to chat with their friends. Eventually,
this
will lead to isolation and depression issue among teenagers. As an example, when teenagers encounter in
dire situation
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a dire situation
dire situations
, they do not have actual friends
to come
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come
out and help them as they only have virtual friends.
Furthermore
, obesity issue is becoming a common issue among adults and children because they are becoming too lazy and comfortable in their sedentary lifestyle. For
instances
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instance
, cleaning the house and preparing for
meal
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a meal
has become a thing of the past, as there are portable vacuum cleaners that cleans the house and
readymade
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ready made
food that can instant cook within 5 minutes.
Furthermore
, over usage of electrical devices
also
affects the natural
environment
as well. As more humans using
this
equipment, they consume more electrical energy,
thus
resulting diminishing amount of natural resources
such
as coal and petroleum.
Moreover
, household devices
such
as air conditioner leads to environmental hazards
such
as thinning of the ozone layer of the Earth as it produces CFC chemical that destroys the ozone layer.
Nevertheless
, people are still obsessed
of
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with
using these gadgets without realizing the impact to the
environment
. In conclusion, the existence of these devices is useful to mankind,
however
, over usage of it can lead to serious effect to the society and the
environment
in the future.
Therefore
, a feasible solution needed to come up to solve it.

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