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Task 2 In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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In quite a number of countries in the world, not so many youths read newsletters or follow
television broadcast
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television broadcasts
 of recent events.
This
 epidemic in our society has eaten deep into our societies.
This
 essay will point out the causes and recommend possible solutions to
this
 current 'disease'.
To begin
, within the past two decades, there has an exponential increase in social activities in our societies. These activities are of great distraction to youths and they prefer discussing or spending more time in these activities rather than read newsletters or watch the broadcast on televisions. These social activities includes, Sports television programs and
also
 watching music videos.
For example
, youths prefer watching and reading a romantic story rather than newsletters because they find it appealing and interesting.
Furthermore
, youths have lost confidence in
reporters
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the reporters
. The rise
in
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of
 fake and
bias
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bus
 information
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 reported daily in the news has led to reduce interest in reading or watching the news by youths. And
also
, reporters don't support youth programs, so a lot of them feel that there is nothing
about them been said
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being said about them
about them being said
 on the news
thus
, no need to listen or read whatever they have to say.
However
, there are better ways to solve these problems. Government should reduce the number of uneducated television programs,
also
, high school teachers should make reading of the national dailies compulsory. News agencies should improve in their content, support youth programs
and
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and, also
also
, publish a lot of articles written by youths. In conclusion, Social activities and lack of inclusive reporting are the major
problems why
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problems, why
 youths are losing interest in reading and listening to news reports.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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