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People say that success is 10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work. Do you agree or disagree and give your opinion

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As we have known that “ on the way to success, there are no trace of lazy man”.
However
, in my viewpoint, in order to succeed, we not only need to have hard
work but
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work, but
also
 depend on other factors
such
 as
talent
, luck and help. It is not easy to be successful for lazy people. Hard work plays an important role in
success
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the success
. The more
time
 you spend on practicing the shorter the distance to your goal is.
For instance
, the scientists have to spend a great deal of
time
 and effort researching and experimenting
by
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with
 many different methods before inventing a new device.
On the other hand
, talented people have more chances to get the accomplishment.
for
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For
 example, there are many. Televised
talent
 shoes for those whom have
talent
 to promote a natural ability so that they are easier to be well known, especially, in modern society.
Besides
, if you have
talent
 in doing something, the
time
 you spend achieving it will be less than others.
Although
 I and my classmate started studying English at the same
time
 and the same course, she is better than me now, because of her
talent
 in learning language. Those factors mentioned above contribute to success but not everything. Someone
are
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is
 really
hardworking
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hard-working
 and talented but lack of luck or help from right mentors, as
this
 result, they find it so difficult to reach their ultimate purpose. In conclusion, each person
have
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has
different way
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a different way
 to make their dream become true. I support idea that there are many reasons to succeed and hard work is one of the most significant things to get your goal
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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