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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Advanced public transportation networks is a sign of
developed
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developing
 countries in
today
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today's
todays
 modern world, It is
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 argued that authorities must utilize more money in train railways
instead
 of roads. I believe it is a money well spent on railways and can bring several advantages.
To begin
 with, many citizens cannot afford the luxury of owning a car and
effective railways system
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effective railway systems
effective railway system
 will be an added value to easy commuting.
For instance
, in European countries the taxes over cars is high which makes owning a vehicle a challenge.
In contrast
, they build
proper train system
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a proper train system
the proper train system
 which even the people who are owners of cars are using it during their daily routine of attending work due to its
convenient
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convenience
 and peace of mind.
As a result
, the number of cars on the road during rush hours decreased which means less traffic jams.
Subsequently
,
air
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the air
 became less polluted
hence
 healthier life.
On the other hand
,
this
 might not be a helpful scenario for the people who are resident in villages and remote areas because usually government does not extend the railways to those areas due to the count of the population and the statistics figures of public transport usage since the majority depends on cars. Neglecting the development of roads in
such
 areas lead to comfortless travel.
Moreover
, it could lead to cars mechanical fault and wear tires. In conclusion, Transportation systems are vital and part of most human daily life. Authorities increasing the fund of
railways
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the railways
is
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are
 beneficial
for
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to
 the society and
environment
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the environment
.
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