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An increasing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What are the problems associated with and some possible solutions?

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Professionals
such
 as doctors and teachers from undeveloped countries are migrating to work in more developed countries. Due to
this
, poorer nations will struggle to develop, which will negatively affect the economy of the country. To tackle the issue, their government should offer better working conditions to them. The foremost
problem
 faced by poorer nations due brain drain, in the fields
such
 as medical science and education, is that they will struggle to develop and find difficult to boost the economy of the nation. The host country invested a lot of money on the education of these
professionals but
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professionals, but
 they do not back anything in return and migrate to rich countries when their turn is
comes
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coming
. As a consequence, these nations face crisis of
economy
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the economy
, and remain undeveloped with respect to education and medicines. In order to address
this
problem
,
government
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the government
 should encourage these professionals to stay there by offering them a better working conditions.
This
 can be done by allocating additional budget towards these professions and increase their wages to a competent level because they deserve it for their hard work in these fields.
For example
, Canada, one of highest paying nations
to
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for
 doctors, to maintain the level of service,
therefore
, their doctors
are not migrating
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is not migrating
 to any other country. In conclusion,
although
 developing nations face a variety of
problem
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problems
such
 as deterioration in development due to migration of professionals,
this
problem
 is not insurmountable. In my view, it is the government responsibility to tackle that issue by offering
pleasurable working environment
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a pleasurable working environment
, they should begin
by
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with
 one of the proposed solutions above.
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