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Would it be better to build houses in existing towns and cities, or to develop new towns in rural areas for increasing population?

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The overpopulation around the globe is on a steep rise. It is believed that for managing the expanding population, a number of new houses in the countryside areas are needed, to which I have dissenting views. On one hand, if the people get shifted to rural areas,
then
 numerous problems will arise. The foremost being, the calm and serene environment of these tranquil places will get disturbed, in turn, affecting the public living in these places.
Moreover
, the land which is used for raising cattle and farming will get depleted; as a consequence, the problem of food scarcity may arise in the future.
Additionally
, these remote areas cover sizeable forest lands, which are home to many wildlife species. Destruction of these areas will ultimately affect their natural habitat.
For instance
, a study has shown that the wild animals
such
 as hares in Australia are on the verge of extinction because of decreasing agricultural land, which is their main source of food.
On the other hand
, the government can introduce various solutions so as to accommodate the rise in inhabitants in the towns and cities.
Firstly
, for making new houses,
instead
 of farmland, barren lands must be used.
Secondly
, new multi-storey building projects must be approved in order to shelter more population in rather congested areas.
Last
 but not the least, the governing bodies must lay emphasis on promoting apartments in the cities rather than allotting big houses and bungalows to a single family, which will help in dwelling a larger number of families. To illustrate
this
, the government of China has restricted the purchase of land to a smaller quantity in order to cope with the growth of natives in the country. To conclude, in my opinion, the peaceful surroundings offered by the farming area must be kept intact and the innovative solutions of coping up with the ever increasing population must be introduced.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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