Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

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It is true that we earn for

living but

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a living, but

a living but

at the same time, job without satisfaction is obsolete. An income will satisfy the needs or wants of

one-self

reflexive form of "one"

oneself

, family,

occassions

something you have to do

occasions

, friends, outings and many more

instead

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. Career growth is

also

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equally important which can be achieved only after having a satisfactory profile.

For instance

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, many

multi national

involving or operating in several nations or nationalities

multinational

companies (MNC), now-a-days, recruit staff with high wages along with high expectations.

Initially

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every thing

all things

everything

is good when it is new for that person; Salary

wise he

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wise, he

/she is very joyous while, slowly the dislike towards the work starts due to various reasons like shift hours, pressure, roles, responsibilities, team mates, boss

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etc

continuing in the same way

etc.

,. In

such

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cases one

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cases, one

has to take it up as a challenge to meet the expectations, in order to motivate themselves with utmost patience. Many a times,

this

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might lead to dissatisfaction towards the job resulting in frustration. Ultimately, a psychological disturbance occurs in the individual, paving way to numerous problems viz., sudden loss of memory power, nervousness, fear, grief, agony, screaming, etc.

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This obviously

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This, obviously

, causes major physical damage creating health problems like spine issues, headaches, brain related sickness,

difference

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differences

a difference

in blood flow,

likewise

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Also

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, it can end with long lasting diseases too on the higher side. Keeping in view all the aforesaid points, it is always better to have

satisfactory job

Suggestion

a satisfactory job

by the end of the day making

one self

reflexive form of "one"

oneself

feel at ease and happiness, rather than focusing on money.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

239 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

remuneration
financial security
motivation
luxuries
material possessions
fulfillment
work-life balance
stress levels
mental well-being
job security

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