Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

It is true that we earn for
living but
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a living, but
a living but
at the same time, job without satisfaction is obsolete. An income will satisfy the needs or wants of
one-self
reflexive form of "one"
oneself
, family,
occassions
something you have to do
occasions
, friends, outings and many more
instead
. Career growth is
also
equally important which can be achieved only after having a satisfactory profile.
For instance
, many
multi national
involving or operating in several nations or nationalities
multinational
companies (MNC), now-a-days, recruit staff with high wages along with high expectations.
Initially
every thing
all things
everything
is good when it is new for that person; Salary
wise he
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wise, he
/she is very joyous while, slowly the dislike towards the work starts due to various reasons like shift hours, pressure, roles, responsibilities, team mates, boss
,
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,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
,. In
such
cases one
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cases, one
has to take it up as a challenge to meet the expectations, in order to motivate themselves with utmost patience. Many a times,
this
might lead to dissatisfaction towards the job resulting in frustration. Ultimately, a psychological disturbance occurs in the individual, paving way to numerous problems viz., sudden loss of memory power, nervousness, fear, grief, agony, screaming, etc.
This obviously
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This, obviously
, causes major physical damage creating health problems like spine issues, headaches, brain related sickness,
difference
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differences
a difference
in blood flow,
likewise
.
Also
, it can end with long lasting diseases too on the higher side. Keeping in view all the aforesaid points, it is always better to have
satisfactory job
Suggestion
a satisfactory job
by the end of the day making
one self
reflexive form of "one"
oneself
feel at ease and happiness, rather than focusing on money.
Submitted by Mrs. Sumira Vempati on

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