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In the last decade, there has been a great increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults. This has been welcomed as a great opportunity by many students, however, other students see these courses as less effective than classroom teaching. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course?

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As said, "Knowledge is Divine", by
elders
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the elders
, it is an
endeavoring
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavouring
 prospect, an individual is blessed with, and which has no end to pursue. Earlier, only classroom
tranings
activity leading to skilled behavior
trainings
 were available or home
tutitions
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuitions
, whereas, in modern days, there are ample
opporutnities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 with many online courses, through the internet connectivity, making people sit at home and learn before the desktop. These courses are made available online in almost all the fields of study like teaching, painting, drawing, cooking, Medical, General knowledge, current affairs, software manuals, and many more. The patterns of these lessons
ae
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
 designed in
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 a way that, none feels there is no
class room
a room in a school where lessons take place
classroom
 experience. Though some are recorded modules, while the others are live sessions with free web casts, pod casts, questionnaires, etc. Coming to
web casts
live video over the Internet
webcasts
 and live shows, one side the student accesses
thorugh
from beginning to end
through
though
 the user names and passwords, whereas
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, the tutor or the mentor sits before
camera
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the camera
, giving a face-to-face exposure while teaching the classes. There are many
advanages
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantages
 as, not all of them can go to the realtime colleges or institutes due to numerous genuine reasons, despite
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 facility is awesomely useful to those individuals on
higher note
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a higher note
higher notes
.
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, a physically challenged person can neither drive to long distances nor climb the staircase.
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, a pregnant woman, an aged woman above 35 or 40,
person
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a person
 who has other medical complaints and so on. Obviously
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 is a handy tool for them to learn as much as they can and achieve their goals, in order to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their dreams.
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, they are cheaper rates compared to the regular times.
Also
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, the travel problems can be avoided consuming the time and money,
furthermore
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, these can be utilized in other ways or purposes. In contrary to
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, it is believed these are less effective due to loss of direct communication, at times, which is not true, but has
lot
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a lot
lots
 of vast coverage of the subject in lieu of the requirement.
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, modern days, these distance education mode and the certifications as
such
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, are recognized by companies in providing jobs too. So far as I believe, there are many advantages in learning through online rather than the disadvantages which are in diminishing count, comparatively.
Submitted by Mrs. Sumira Vempati on

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