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Students should live with parents rather than live away from home when studying at university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that some students choose to live with their parents while studying at
university
. I partly agree with
such
 a choice,
although
 there are some disadvantages. There are a number of reasons why young people should live with their parents when they are pursuing their studies.
Firstly
, it is expensive to study full-time, and most students in the UK,
for example
, are forced to take out a student loan. In the worst case, some students have to work their way through
university
, and their performance inevitably suffers. Living at home means that they do not have to pay for accommodation, and they are able to economize.
Secondly
, less mature students need the discipline imposed by parents, to ensure that they attend their classes and do not fall behind with their studies.
Although
 these benefits are considerable, it must
also
 be admitted that there are some advantages to studying away from home. Perhaps the main one is that students are able to escape the distractions of family life, and thereby establish study routines and form friendships with other students who find themselves in the same situation. Learning to live, as well as to think, independently is one of the formative experiences of a
university
 education. Another aspect is that students who live away from home tend to become more involved in the huge range of extra-curricular activities which social life at
university
 offers. These help to develop interests and talents,
such
 as sports, music or drama. In conclusion, I would agree in part that students should live with their parents while studying, though they will miss out on some of the richness of
university
 life
as a result
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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