As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Advancement of technology
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as innovations
of
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in
electrical equipment like computers and television as a great impact on our daily activities, people tends to engage in less physical exercise as
this
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has greater effect on health. Which I
strongly agree to
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strongly agree
.
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, using all forms of electronic gadgets
for example
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, computer aid
work
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works
faster,
thus
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making work more productive. People
tends
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tend
to use lesser period on a particular task and job delivery system are faster while prolonging of works are being limited.
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boasting source of income with less stress.
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,
introduction
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the introduction
of online
businesses people
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businesses, people
tend to buy and sell goods without being stressed.
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transaction can be done at
faster rate
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a faster rate
.
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Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, some of
electrical equipment
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the electrical equipment
serve
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serves
as
means
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a means
of relaxation for people. Watching of various films and news can be done
at
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in
comfort zone with either
there
of them or themselves
their
phones, television or palmtops, which makes
life
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's convent and enjoyable Despite the benefit mention above peoples sedentary
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life's
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life
style
tend
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tends
to increase on
daily basis which
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a daily basis, which
a daily basis which
as
negative effect
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a negative effect
negative effects
on health. Engaging in physical activities helps in
burning
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the burning
of fats and calories
thus
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,
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,
preventing disease conditions
such
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as Diabetics and heart related issues.
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instance some
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instance, some
scientists conducted Research at Harvard university stated that physical exercise helps in mental and physical
wellbeing
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well being
.
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, giving you
good sense
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a good sense
of reasoning and having a good reproductive
life
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. In conclusion, modern electronic inventions make
life
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and work easier,
also
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some serve as relaxation means.
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, it should be
use
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used
with caution so as to maintain a healthful
life
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.
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