As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Advancement of technology
such
as innovations of
electrical equipment like computers and television as a great impact on our daily activities, people tends to engage in less physical exercise as Suggestion
in
this
has greater effect on health. Which I strongly agree to
.
Suggestion
strongly agree
Although
, using all forms of electronic gadgets for example
, computer aid work
faster, Suggestion
works
thus
making work more productive. People tends
to use lesser period on a particular task and job delivery system are faster while prolonging of works are being limited. Suggestion
tend
Thus
boasting source of income with less stress. For instance
, introduction
of online Suggestion
the introduction
businesses people
tend to buy and sell goods without being stressed. Accept comma addition
businesses, people
Also
transaction can be done at faster rate
. Suggestion
a faster rate
Further more
, some of in addition
Furthermore
electrical equipment
Suggestion
the electrical equipment
serve
as Suggestion
serves
means
of relaxation for people. Watching of various films and news can be done Suggestion
a means
at
comfort zone with either Suggestion
in
there
phones, television or palmtops, which makes of them or themselves
their
life
's convent and enjoyable
Despite the benefit mention above peoples sedentary life's
style Suggestion
life
tend
to increase on Suggestion
tends
daily basis which
as Suggestion
a daily basis, which
a daily basis which
negative effect
on health. Engaging in physical activities helps in Suggestion
a negative effect
negative effects
burning
of fats and calories Suggestion
the burning
thus
,
preventing disease conditions Accept space
,
such
as Diabetics and heart related issues. For
instance some
scientists conducted Research at Harvard university stated that physical exercise helps in mental and physical Accept comma addition
instance, some
wellbeing
. Suggestion
well being
Thus
, giving you good sense
of reasoning and having a good reproductive Suggestion
a good sense
life
.
In conclusion, modern electronic inventions make life
and work easier, also
some serve as relaxation means. However
, it should be use
with caution so as to maintain a healthful Suggestion
used
life
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