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Question 3 Computers are becoming an essential part of school lessons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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Electronic gadgets are becoming an important aspect of
school
 lesson. While the advantages of
this
supersedes
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supersede
, it
also
 has its demerits.
This
 essay will discuss distraction and addiction to computer as its main disadvantage and technological approach to learning as its primary advantage. The introduction of electronic learning in schools
have raised
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has raised
 concerns regarding distractions where a lot of the children's attention is
turn
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turned
 away from the primary purpose of learning into other facilities in the computer.
For instance
,
Karim international
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the Karim international school
school
 recently disapproved the
use
 if computers during
school
 hours.
Additionally
, the
use
 of electronic gadget
have been revealed
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has been revealed
 to cause addiction to
school
children which
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children, which
 in turn undermines the human ability and interferes with logical reasoning. Research conducted by
National mathematical centre
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the National mathematical centre
 revealed that 57% of
school
 rely on computers for arithmetic addition. Despite arguments about the drawbacks of the
use
 if
computers for
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computers, for
school
 work, it is believed to improve the technical know-how of children leading to building of smarter kids. National association of paediatric doctors carried out a study which showed that 60% of children exposed to electronic gadgets appeared smarter than others. In conclusion, distractions and addiction are considered the demerits of computer usage in
school
 but with cautious
use
, the
technological
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technologically
 advantage of its usage is more beneficial.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Edutainment
  • Multimedia resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Ergonomic hazards
  • Cognitive overload
  • Technological proficiency
  • Blended learning environments
  • Instructional technology
  • Adaptive software
  • Screen time management
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