A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: • describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team • summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts • say how you think the company should spend the money

I want to express my appreciation for the decision of sponsoring either the local junior sports team or the concerts by your prominent company.
First
of all, spending money on the training and
equipments
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types of equipment
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of the local team will be very beneficial as it will not only encourage the players but
also
advertise the name of your company at
national
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level.
On the other hand
, organising two concerts will help the local musicians along with the local shopkeepers to burgeon in the long run as they will attract more business from the tourists. Indeed, it will even help to promote our culture and heritage. Albeit, both the initiatives are commendable,
however
, in my view, funding the young sports team will be a better idea; for it will encourage them to work hard and to bring glory by participating in
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international events enthusiastically in the future. Thank you again for
such
a praiseworthy initiative for the community.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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