Many people these days have computer, laptops, telephones at their homes for work. Do you thibk, working from home has more advantages or disadvantages? Give reasons

   Recent advancements in telecommunications
has made
Suggestion
have made
the world a global village. From mobile phones to portable laptops to video conference calls, working from the comfort of one's
home
has never
being
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
seamless. Whilst there are disadvantages to
this
development, in my opinion, the benefits of being able to work from the confines of one's
home
has
Suggestion
have
more advantages.    Working from
home
gives the false notion that people can coordinate better.
However
,
reverse
Suggestion
the reverse
is the case. It makes the worker more prone to distractions
such
as television or video games which can result in sloppy decision making and inability to meet deadlines which in the end can be detrimental to the business.
Furthermore
, not being in a workplace environment can dampen motivation and healthy workplace competition.
For instance
, experts have revealed that having a workplace structure can improve efficiency by almost forty percent.    
On the other hand
, being able to work from
home
confers flexibility on the person involved. It enables the worker to be able to fix more activities into his or her schedule without being confined to a desk.
Secondly
, it allows for more family
time which
Accept comma addition
time, which
is becoming
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
in
this
ever-changing world.
For instance
, a mother working from
home
has both the advantage of overseeing her children's extra-curricular activities and not feeling left out of their childhood.    
Thirdly
, it helps reduce transportation costs and that money can be diverted elsewhere for
further
growth and development of the individual.
Furthermore
, it helps the society by
reducingthe
Suggestion
reducing the
amount of cars on the
road thereby
Accept comma addition
road, thereby
eliminating environmental pollution and making the planet safer.    Gadgets have always made our lives easier. Even though there is a downside to every technology, in my opinion, working from
home
is
Suggestion
has been
more advantageous not just to the individual but to the society at large.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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