A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

The world has experienced countless advances in various aspects,
for instance
-law and technology-
alas it
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alas, it
seems that despite the
awareness
campaigns
of
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on
human rights and poverty, humanity is gradually dwindling rather than progressing.
Awareness
campaigns,
although
beneficial in numerous ways, have
also
served to have a
detrimetal
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detrimental
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
on the outlook of an individual towards his fellow human beings. Individuals and society as a whole has become hyper-aware about material
posessions
the act of having and controlling property
possessions
and social
status
.
This
has led to three basic situations:
Firstly
, there are people who embrace
this
awareness
negatively- meaning that they show blatant disdain or indifference towards people of lower social
status
and admiration towards people of a higher social
status
.
For example
.
children
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Children
are often bullied in school because of their low social
status
and
thus
, their inability to purchase expensive items.
On the other hand
, children of a higher social
status
are admired and followed, which is
further
emphasized by television shows showing poor girls - more often than not- pinning after rich boys. The
second
brand of people
are
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is
those who embrace
this
awareness
postively
extremely
positively
- meaning that they show kindness and compassion towards people of lower social
status
,
however
, some of these people hold certain - perhaps unfair- expectations of generosity from people of a higher socioeconomic
status
.
This
can be seen by accusations placed on the
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people regarding
insufficent
of a quantity not able to fulfill a need or requirement
insufficient
donations, etc. These two types of people, intentionally or unintentionally, judge others based on their material possessions and
thus
, cause separations between people of differing wealth, which
consequently
, serves to fragment society and burden relationships between individuals. The
last
type of people are those who ignore
this
awareness
and attempt to view each individual as a person, not a social
status
to react to. Unfortunately, it seems that
such
people are few. Society was most certainly not like
this
some years ago,
this
is due to the fact that
such
campaigns were scarce in olden times. Material prosperity was an observation, not an aspect to be mindful of.
Although
, discrimination did indeed exist, people more often than not, used other factors to determine their worth and the worth of those around them. In a room, people would judge each other based on courage, sense of justice, kindness and trust while other factors remained a small aspect in the background of their minds. I agree to a great extent that people are judged based on their material possessions because the words 'Poverty' and 'Equality' have become ingrained in individuals' minds to
such
an extent that their
first
reaction when seeing someone different is to tell
themselves
objective case of they
them
not to judge, which is futile as it increases the likely hood and urge to judge- which most people give
into
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in to
.
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