Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is
controversial issue
Suggestion
a controversial issue
that whether consumers are tricked by different forms of
advertisement
into buying goods unreasonably or that
advertisement
helps them make informed decisions to buy what they want. To some extent I agree that advertising has an impact on sales, but I would
also
agree that we do need most of the goods that we buy. On the one hand, there are people who argue that
advertisement
Suggestion
advertising
agencies nowadays have become extremely clever in convincing people to buy certain products. The reason for
this
belief is that many people are making purchases that simply do not reflect any of their personal needs because they just want to stay
up date
Suggestion
updated
update
with the latest fashions.
For instance
, every year people can be seen queuing to buy the latest models of mobile phone, even when they already have a perfectly good phone that does not need replacing.
Furthermore
, advertisements encourage
sale
Suggestion
the sale
of inferior products so people are tempted by handsome prices without concerning about real quality as well as their demand.
On the other hand
, it is often argued that the benefits of
advertisement
considerably outweigh its disadvantages.
Firstly
, there are a lot of new useful products coming out every day and the only way to know more information about them is through advertisements.
Therefore
, if the customers have demand for
any
quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
items, they will take some advertisements into account. One interesting illustration of
this
is the promotion of new medications which help doctors prescribe and educate patients about the benefits of these medications.
In addition
, new products almost always have improved features that buyers may want so they need to be advertised for the best sales. A new car,
for example
, may have greatly improved safety features, more economic to run or it may pollute less. In conclusion, while advertising obviously influences our buying
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, I do not agree that people make decisions that against their real needs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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