In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country , while others believe government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Although
it is
smetimes
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
thought that countries benefit from
few people
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a few people
the few people
who are paid wages in excess amount, some people believe monthly earnings should be regulated by the government and a minimum wage should be fixed. In my opinion, I consider that a
country
stands to gain a lot from the few individuals who
earnn
earn on some commercial or business transaction; earn as salary or wages
earn
very huge salaries. On the one hand, those who are paid
high amount
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a high amount
of salaries are specialist of their different fields and contribute
immersely
to an exceedingly great extent or degree
immensely
to the economy of a
country
.
This
is to say that, they are well grounded with years of experience and deserve every ounce of money paid to them, of which the government eventually gains through the
tax
they pay.
For instance
,
neurologist
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the neurologist
a neurologist
are
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is
quite few in each
country
, these sets of workers are paid large income on
monthly basis
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a monthly basis
, but
at
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in
as
the
country
gains economically through the large percentage of
tax
they pay.
In addition
, high salary earners contribute intellectually to their
country
by educating the younger ones and giving
advise
a proposal for an appropriate course of action
advice
to the leadership of their
country
.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
it is believed all workers the system should regulate salaries earned by
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
people. Many workers earn very low income which can barely sustain them and their families. If the top earners are placed on the same
reange
an area in which something acts or operates or has power or control
range
ranges
of
in come
the financial gain (earned or unearned) accruing over a given period of time
income
with the common people, there will be a quick drive and response to minimum wage increase so it could benefit them as well.
Furthermore
, the huge salaries paid can be used to employ more workers and
consequently
there will be an increase in the
tax
.
Increase
Suggestion
The increase
An increase
in he numbers of
employees
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employees, for
for example
,
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,
will mean more people paying
tax
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taxes
and eventually an improvement in the economy of the
country
. In conclusion,
although
many people share different opinions, I think that the government should give people the liberty to earn what they deserve and have toiled for over the years.
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