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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country , while others believe government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Although
 it is
smetimes
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
 thought that countries benefit from
few people
Suggestion
a few people
the few people
 who are paid wages in excess amount, some people believe monthly earnings should be regulated by the government and a minimum wage should be fixed. In my opinion, I consider that a
country
 stands to gain a lot from the few individuals who
earnn
earn on some commercial or business transaction; earn as salary or wages
earn
 very huge salaries. On the one hand, those who are paid
high amount
Suggestion
a high amount
 of salaries are specialist of their different fields and contribute
immersely
to an exceedingly great extent or degree
immensely
 to the economy of a
country
.
This
 is to say that, they are well grounded with years of experience and deserve every ounce of money paid to them, of which the government eventually gains through the
tax
 they pay.
For instance
,
neurologist
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the neurologist
a neurologist
are
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is
 quite few in each
country
, these sets of workers are paid large income on
monthly basis
Suggestion
a monthly basis
, but
at
Suggestion
in
as
 the
country
 gains economically through the large percentage of
tax
 they pay.
In addition
, high salary earners contribute intellectually to their
country
 by educating the younger ones and giving
advise
a proposal for an appropriate course of action
advice
 to the leadership of their
country
.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
it is believed all workers the system should regulate salaries earned by
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 people. Many workers earn very low income which can barely sustain them and their families. If the top earners are placed on the same
reange
an area in which something acts or operates or has power or control
range
ranges
 of
in come
the financial gain (earned or unearned) accruing over a given period of time
income
 with the common people, there will be a quick drive and response to minimum wage increase so it could benefit them as well.
Furthermore
, the huge salaries paid can be used to employ more workers and
consequently
 there will be an increase in the
tax
.
Increase
Suggestion
The increase
An increase
 in he numbers of
employees
Accept comma addition
employees, for
for example
,
Accept space
,
will mean more people paying
tax
Suggestion
taxes
 and eventually an improvement in the economy of the
country
. In conclusion,
although
 many people share different opinions, I think that the government should give people the liberty to earn what they deserve and have toiled for over the years.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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