Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some argue that
adolescent years
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the adolescent years
are the best times in an individual’s life, while others think that
grown-ups
a fully developed person from maturity onward
grownups
are happier, despite more responsibility. While teenagers tend to be carefree and stress-free, I believe that being an adult is
more satisfactory
Suggestion
more satisfying
because of financial
freedom
. On the one hand, teenagers are less stressed and carefree than adults because they do not have any financial or social obligations. They have more time to pursue their hobbies and discover interests that can excite them.
For example
, according to the survey conducted by the American Youth Association,
majority
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the majority
a majority
of the marathons in the country have teenage participants, since most of adults stated that they could not join due other obligations.
However
, I believe that teenagers can only be content to a certain extend because money is an important aspect
for
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of
acquiring many things in life, and they do not have the financial
freedom
to get them yet.
On the other hand
, adults tend to be more satisfied because they have the financial
freedom
to choose what they like. Compared to children, adults do not need to ask permission from anyone on where to spend their money, and can buy things that comfort them.
For instance
, I am 34 years old working professional and I do not need to ask anybody if I want to take a quick vacation. I believe that adulthood is more desirable because financial
freedom
can help you to buy things that makes you happy. In conclusion,
although
teenage years are a
careless
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caring
and stress-free period, it can only make teenagers happy to a certain limit, as they require monetary assistance to buy things, and
that is
why adulthood is better because it offers financial
freedom
.
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