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Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why?

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People are reluctant to try novice things in their lives.
This
 essay will discuss that
this
 creates a hindrance to their progress and the
problem
 can be resolved by creating awareness among individuals. The primary
problem
 that men and women face by avoiding changes is the lack of progress in their lives. It could be seen that those who do not embrace changes outside of their comfort zone are not able to achieve anything big in their lives.
This
 tendency of risk aversion often hinders their growth both personally and professionally as they are unable to realize their full potential.
For
example no
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example, no
 new inventions can be invented if people are unwilling to change the usual manner in which things are done. The solution to
this
problem
 is to create awareness by use of social media. People are highly influenced by social media campaign which has
large following
Suggestion
a large following
 and they believe that by being a part of
such
 campaign they are making a massive difference.
Such
 campaigns which will ask people to try something new in their daily lives will definitely attract millions of followers and by seeing each other activities will persuade them to follow it
.
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.
For
example recently
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example, recently
 a “water campaign” in
Rajasthan India
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Rajasthan, India
 in which people were asked to conserve water in their day to day activities was a massive success and resulted in huge conservation of water. In conclusion, while it might not be very tempting to try something new, it might hamper the growth of an individual and creating online awareness could solve
this
problem
 to a great extent. It is predicted that
such
 a search campaign might start in the near future.
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