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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Wat do u think in this case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

#people #clothes #wat #case
It's often said that
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,
fashion
 represents
an
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a
 persons nature. True to
this
, many of them are becoming bold
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by wearing fashionable clothes. The good things are
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people are coming out of their traditional umbrella- trying to be updated
in
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on
 every
aspects
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aspect
.Many countries in the name of culture
suppresed
kept from public knowledge by various means;
suppressed
 or forced people to wear traditional clothes. But not anymore, thanks to the globalisation, which has connected and changed people's mentality around the world.
For instance
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,
many
islamic
of or relating to or supporting Islamism
Islamic
 nations are slowly accepting
people's choice
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the people's choice
 of
fashion
. But the bad thing is, the new era of
fashion
 has
witness
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witnessed
 dramatic changes in countries culture and traditions in
an
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a
 negative way. People wearing lucrative clothes like
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,
wearing low jeans and displaying their inner wears
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,
in the name of
fashion
, has become awkward. And some
has gone
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have gone
 to an extent wearing clothes made of
animals
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animal
 fur has caused ripples in the society. Recently, a
fashion
 show conducted by vogue, witnessed a celebrity wearing clothes made of ostrich feathers, which caused
quiet
to a degree (not used with a negative)
quite
 a stir in Australia, as it was their country's national bird and was listed as an endangered species. To conclude, wearing fashionable clothes is a good thing
.
Accept space
.
 But at the same time, it must not be proactive and harmful to the world. Like said by Michael Kores '
Fashion
 sometimes is a disaster '.
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