Some people believe that employers should not concerned about the way their employees dress, but they should be concerned about the quality at work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

We have been living during the period when people are perhaps more image conscious than ever before due to social media and the influence of airbrushing in daily life and in the workplace. In my opinion, the
work
performance
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performed
is
necessary but
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necessary, but
it
is not plays
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doesn't play
does not play
has not played
hasn't played
isn't playing
is not playing
an important in
workplace
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the workplace
.
On the other hand
, only focusing on the quality of
work
could indeed boost productivity. For employers, the more productive their employees are, the more profit they will make. In
this
case, empowering and encouraging employees to improve the quality of
work
contributes to greater efficiency and increased income of the
company
and employers as well. But
this
also unfortunately create
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also unfortunately creates
is also unfortunately creating
has also unfortunately created
negative impacts on the
company
profitability. For examples, if employees wearing casually dressed attend a formal meeting,
this
is able to impress colleagues or collaborative partners as a worker who does not show enough respect,
thus
possibly leading to an unnecessary failure in cooperation.
However
, if employers prioritize the output of employees rather than a personal and professional appearance,
this
will
also
inflict o poor image both on the
company
and on its employees, especially in
service industry
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the service industry
service industries
a service industry
.
This
is mainly because
first
impressions are crucial in these industries. Wearing a uniform or formal dress does not only show respect for customers and clients, but
also
reveals a high-quality, professional service or products, an effective performance to gain a positive image as well as customer loyalty.
Moreover
, the aspect of
company
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the company
a company
, productivity, and profitability will gradually become worse and decrease, respectively. In conclusion, the quality of
work
is
irreplaceable but
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irreplaceable, but
it is not the driving factor behind the development of a
company
, and what employees wear and look in the workplace does matter for customers, employers and themselves.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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