Violence in media promotes violence in society. To what extend do you agree?

Media has great impact on the society in recent days. The violences broadcast in media
boost
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boosts
the
cruleity
a cruel act; a deliberate infliction of pain and suffering
cruelty
in society. In my opinion the brutality of people is increasing due to promotion of crimes in
medias
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the media
media
Firstly
, the teenagers
are commiting
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is committing
are committing
are commuting
are commenting
more heinous crimes because of their interest in playing horror and most thrilling games leads to accept the challenge publish by game administrators. For an example, the most popular horror game is "blue whale challenge "which the player has to accept the task in step by step process starting by
perform
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performing
criminal task end
upto
killing himself or others.
Secondly
, young generation
spend
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spends
watching cartoons,
you tube
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YouTube
youtube
videos or movie more than 4-5 hours in their daily routine and most of these entertainments have physical violence.
This
leads them to think that it is normal things to commit crimes.
This
can be illustrated by increasing no of incidents
such
as physical abuse
by
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of
school student
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a school student
. Recently a case was reported in Mumbai school, a sixth standard student was killed by his senior for not sharing seats in school bus.
However there
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However, there
are many useful and vast advanced information available in
medias
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the media
media
especially internet including development of recent technologies and help us to learn and update in
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time, fractions
but there are no restrictions on availing these contents even if they contain violent feature.
Furthermore
,
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,
the
terrorists
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terrorist
activities
are recently advancing
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have recently advanced
with the help of
internet especially
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the internet, especially
the internet especially
instant access of videos of making advanced bombs as well as recruiting freshers and training providing through video calls.They promote communal riots by floating more videos of slaughtering people based on religion in social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
and create unrest among other people by dividing among religion
.
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.
For instance
, ISIS group recruiting many Muslim people from India with the help of mass killing videos by the name of religion published through social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
like Facebook, Instagram and Twitter. In conclusion, by considering the fact of increasing
crimical
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminal
critical
activities by young people and
terrorists
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terrorist
activities in recent days, the violence in society
are
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is
more spreading and advancing with help of atrocities broadcasting through
medias
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the media
media
models
mediums
only.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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