Violence in media promotes violence in society. To what extend do you agree?

Media has great impact on the society in recent days. The violences broadcast in media
boost
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boosts
the
cruleity
a cruel act; a deliberate infliction of pain and suffering
cruelty
in society. In my opinion the brutality of people is increasing due to promotion of crimes in
media
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the media
.
Firstly
, the teenagers
are commiting
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is committing
are committing
are commuting
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more heinous crimes because of their interest in playing horror and most thrilling games and these games are promoted by social media to increase the selling ratio irrespective of their violent nature
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For an example, the most promoted popular horror game is "blue whale challenge " where the player has to accept the task in step by step process starting by performing criminal task end till killing himself or others.
Secondly
, the young generation spends time watching cartoons,
you tube
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YouTube
youtube
videos or movie more than 4-5 hours in their daily routine and most of these entertainments have physical violence and lead them to think that it is a normal thing to commit crimes.
This
can be illustrated by increasing no of incidents
such
as physical abuse
by
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of
school student
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a school student
. Recently a case was reported in Mumbai school, a sixth standard student was killed by his senior for not sharing seats in school bus.
In addition
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,
the
terrorists
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terrorist
activities
are recently advancing
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have recently advanced
with the help of
internet especially
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the internet, especially
the internet especially
instant access of videos of making advanced bombs as well as recruiting freshers and training providing through video calls.They promote communal riots by floating more videos of slaughtering people based on religion in social media and create unrest among other people by dividing among religion
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For an instance, ISIS group recruiting many Muslim people from India with the help of mass killing videos by the name of religion published through social media like Facebook, Instagram and Twitter.
However
, there are many useful and vast advance information available in
media especially
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the media, especially
the media especially
internet including development
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the internet including development
of recent technologies and help us to learn and update in
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but there are no restrictions on availing these contents even if they contain violent feature. In conclusion, by considering the fact of increasing
crimical
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminal
critical
activities by young people and
terrorists
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terrorist
activities in recent days, the violence in society
are
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is
more spreading and advancing with help of atrocities broadcasting through
medias
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the media
media
models
mediums
only.

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