Violence in media promotes violence in society. To what extend do you agree?

Media has great impact on the society in recent days. The violences broadcast in media

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boosts

the

cruleity

a cruel act; a deliberate infliction of pain and suffering

cruelty

in society. In my opinion the brutality of people is increasing due to promotion of crimes in

media

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the media

Firstly

, the teenagers

are commiting

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is committing

are committing

are commuting

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more heinous crimes because of their interest in playing horror and most thrilling games and these games are promoted by social media to increase the selling ratio irrespective of their violent nature

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For an example, the most promoted popular horror game is "blue whale challenge " where the player has to accept the task in step by step process starting by performing criminal task end till killing himself or others.

Secondly

, the young generation spends time watching cartoons,

you tube

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YouTube

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videos or movie more than 4-5 hours in their daily routine and most of these entertainments have physical violence and lead them to think that it is a normal thing to commit crimes.

This

can be illustrated by increasing no of incidents

such

as physical abuse

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school student

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a school student

. Recently a case was reported in Mumbai school, a sixth standard student was killed by his senior for not sharing seats in school bus.

In addition

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the

terrorists

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terrorist

activities

are recently advancing

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have recently advanced

with the help of

internet especially

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the internet, especially

the internet especially

instant access of videos of making advanced bombs as well as recruiting freshers and training providing through video calls.They promote communal riots by floating more videos of slaughtering people based on religion in social media and create unrest among other people by dividing among religion

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For an instance, ISIS group recruiting many Muslim people from India with the help of mass killing videos by the name of religion published through social media like Facebook, Instagram and Twitter.

However

, there are many useful and vast advance information available in

media especially

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the media, especially

the media especially

internet including development

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the internet including development

of recent technologies and help us to learn and update in

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time, fractions

but there are no restrictions on availing these contents even if they contain violent feature. In conclusion, by considering the fact of increasing

crimical

someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime

criminal

critical

activities by young people and

terrorists

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terrorist

activities in recent days, the violence in society

are

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more spreading and advancing with help of atrocities broadcasting through

medias

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the media

media

models

mediums

only.

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