Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

Countries economic growth is a major topic for governments around the world. Some citizens believe other
sectors
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sector
sector's
development is as vital as
economical
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economies
economically
prosper. I agree that economic expansion must be the main focus.
To begin
with, Authorities direct most of the country’s capital towards development projects
such
as infrastructure, agriculture, export, commerce and manufacture. In Egypt, more that 70% of the government budget goes into farming and livestock projects and the income from those 2 sectors are directed into other segments.
As a result
, people noticed enhancement in the transportation network and its services.
Additionally
, the quality of education increased as more money
is spend
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is spent
in advancing the school and university systems offering more chances for students to learn at less cost
hence
parents became satisfied witness their children involved in proper education.
Subsequently
, ease the life of citizens and provide them with
quality
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the quality
of life and less burden. Considering other kinds of progress, in order for governments to progress other segments, economic stability is required. In that prospective, without solid economic authorities will not have the power to flourish other divisions. To illustrate, the leadership in Egypt, utilize 80% of its financial resources into
military sector leaving
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the military sector, leaving
the military sector leaving
only 20% for the rest of sectors including economic evolution.
Moreover
, the economics of the country experienced trending
fall leading
Accept comma addition
fall, leading
to regress across all sectors and lower exports due to the authorities miss planning. In conclusion, budget is the base of development because without it authorities will not have
money
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
resources to increase expenditure against other sectors
hence
the chance for advancement.
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