Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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Since the Industrial revolution in 18th century human has been destroying the surrounding ecosystem in a rapid pace for their own benefits. While many people believe that environmental changes are the main reason of the loss of endangered species, others argued that there are more significant impacts on other areas.

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essay will discuss both

point

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points

of views and accept the latter option as more accurate. Since human become industrialized on a large-scale we are adversely impacting our

surrounding

the environmental condition

surroundings

in an astonishing rate. Trees are cut off to pave way for industries to

grow which

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grow, which

resulted shrinking of

overall forest area

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the overall forest area

. As an outcome, our ecosystem has changed - the delicate balance between different species in a Food-chain has destroyed. Many fauna and flora couldn't cope up with the changing habitat and have gone extinct.

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, it is estimated that

current extinction rate

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the current extinction rate

is about 100 per million species per

year which

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year, which

1000 times higher than the normal rate due to natural evolution. On the other end, others argued that not only environmental changes triggered the

extinction but

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extinction, but

also

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caused

major impact

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a major impact

in other areas

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as global warming and natural disasters. Due to the large number of industries and countless vehicles on our roads,

green house

a building with glass walls and roof; for the cultivation and exhibition of plants under controlled conditions

greenhouse

gas emission has been skyrocketed which caused

temperature

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temperatures

the temperature

to rise in a freighting way. Resulted the sea level to rise and gradually reducing overall land area. Many

cities

the piece of land on which something is located (or is to be located)

sites

which are situated by the ocean, are facing huge challenge to

counter act

act in opposition to

counteract

the changes.

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, global warming is causing unexpected weather patterns.

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, natural disasters like Hurricane Florence is 2018 caused many people to die and billions of dollars in losses

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properties. In conclusion,

although

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the changing habitat is one of the main factors for many to lost in the history, I think it has contributed other major problems

such

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as rising temperature which we should all be concerned with and make

effort

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efforts

an effort

the effort

reduced

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reduce

it.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

325 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

biodiversity
extinction
habitat loss
ecosystem
food chain
imbalance
interconnected
climate change
pollution
personal actions
policy changes
education
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Fully explain your ideas

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