Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Since the Industrial revolution in 18th century human has been destroying the surrounding ecosystem in a rapid pace for their own benefits. While many people believe that environmental changes are the main reason of the loss of endangered species, others argued that there are more significant impacts on other areas.
This
essay will discuss both
point
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points
of views and accept the latter option as more accurate. Since human become industrialized on a large-scale we are adversely impacting our
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
in an astonishing rate. Trees are cut off to pave way for industries to
grow which
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grow, which
resulted shrinking of
overall forest area
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the overall forest area
. As an outcome, our ecosystem has changed - the delicate balance between different species in a Food-chain has destroyed. Many fauna and flora couldn't cope up with the changing habitat and have gone extinct.
For example
, it is estimated that
current extinction rate
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the current extinction rate
is about 100 per million species per
year which
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year, which
1000 times higher than the normal rate due to natural evolution. On the other end, others argued that not only environmental changes triggered the
extinction but
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extinction, but
also
caused
major impact
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a major impact
in other areas
such
as global warming and natural disasters. Due to the large number of industries and countless vehicles on our roads,
green house
a building with glass walls and roof; for the cultivation and exhibition of plants under controlled conditions
greenhouse
gas emission has been skyrocketed which caused
temperature
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temperatures
the temperature
to rise in a freighting way. Resulted the sea level to rise and gradually reducing overall land area. Many
cities
the piece of land on which something is located (or is to be located)
sites
which are situated by the ocean, are facing huge challenge to
counter act
act in opposition to
counteract
the changes.
Also
, global warming is causing unexpected weather patterns.
For instance
, natural disasters like Hurricane Florence is 2018 caused many people to die and billions of dollars in losses
in
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on
properties. In conclusion,
although
the changing habitat is one of the main factors for many to lost in the history, I think it has contributed other major problems
such
as rising temperature which we should all be concerned with and make
effort
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efforts
an effort
the effort
to
reduced
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reduce
it.
Submitted by Masud on

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