Should young people follow the older people’s examples or it’s good for them to challenge older people’s opinions and thoughts. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Peoples

are divided

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divide

on opinions that

youngster

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youngsters

a youngster

should follow the

elder

advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)

older

people’s

views whereas

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views, whereas

others thinks that they should challenge elder people’s views. Some

are argue

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argue

are arguing

have argued

that accepting the

view

elder

advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)

older

people is good as they had

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experience in all the

field but

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fields, but

fields but

some says that challenging the

view

of aged people can

some time

on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always

sometimes

sometime

help them to

discovers

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discover

the new things.

This

essay agrees that

youngster

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youngsters

the youngster

a youngster

should challenge the old traditions and discovers the new method and new way of solving peculiar problems. On one hand the accepting the

view

old

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older

people is going to help the young adults because they

has

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have

experience in that subject and had already

try

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tried

doing

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all the methods.

However

the young people are new to the problems and they can make any problem worse without knowing the full knowledge. For instant in industries older peoples are more important and they are allowed to take all the decisions has they know all the methods to mitigate problems or to avoid

accident

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accidents

an accident

that can occur over there, whereas young people without having full knowledge can cause more damage to the industry.

However on

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However, on

the

counter part

a person or thing having the same function or characteristics as another

counterpart

, challenging the old methods

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for

elder

advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)

older

people can advent the new trick of solving the problems. The possibility of failure is

also

same but

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same, but

it is said that

person

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a person

people

can learn from their own mistake

thus

it is good to encourage them. University research has

shows

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shown

that

majority

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the majority

a majority

of new generations tends to discover new methods by challenging the old traditions and innovate new things. That’s why encouraging young minds will help to find simple and easy way of solving

specific problem

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specific problems

a specific problem

. In conclusion,

this

essay

agrees even

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agrees, even

though elder people having a good experience youngster should challenge their

view

for innovating new method.

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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26Grammar mistakes
 

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299 words

4.50

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Should young people follow the older people’s examples or it’s good for them to challenge older people’s opinions and thoughts. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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