Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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It is considered by some that spreading
information
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about scientific research,
business
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and academic must be
encouraged whereas
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encouraged, whereas
there are others who assume some
information
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is vital or treasured. In my opinion, I believe some
information
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is better kept undisclosed or shared at a cost. On the one hand, those who think that sharing
information
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for free is
good habit
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a good habit
, enjoy
benefits
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the benefits
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people are
also
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receiving
information
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in return in the three mentioned fields.
This
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would in return, lead to advancements and
development
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development, such
such
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as more profit or new invention.
Moreover
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, giving
information
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help in building relationship, trust, collaboration among groups and organizations.
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,
business
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will flourish and more breakthrough in scientific study will be discovered.
On the other hand
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, keeping some data unrevealed is a wise practice,
such
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as data which could make a certain
business
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achieve
higher sale target
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higher sales targets
higher sales target
a higher sales target
or a research which assist in manufacturing a new product that could prosper the economics of certain country if exported.
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, a
developing
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development
bank
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in Sudan conducted a survey in a rural area.
As a result
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, using the data collected in the survey, the
bank
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opened a branch in that area
hence
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assisting the
bank
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to grow and gain more
business
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. If that data was leaked to the
bank
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competitors without a suitable deal, it would be a great lost and wasted effort. The upshot is that thought there is a dilemma of whether
information
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sharing is noble or some
information
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must remain
hidden
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hidden, however
however
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, I feel some
information
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is better kept classified due to their importance and significance and must be shared at a cost.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • accelerates progress
  • innovative discoveries
  • transparency
  • open access
  • verify results
  • fraudulent
  • ethical practices
  • consumer trust
  • potential risk
  • misuse
  • sensitive information
  • genetic data
  • defense-related technologies
  • proprietary information
  • trade secrets
  • competitive edge
  • value
  • investment of time and resources
  • compensation
  • disincentivize
  • recoup costs
  • balanced approach
  • policies and agreements
  • sensitive data
  • fair compensation
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