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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life in other planets some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money Addressing problems of public

#government #money #life #planets #people
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It is commonly believed that pouring a lot of the governmental resources to unravel universe is
absolute waste
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an absolute waste
 of them,
however
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, they better be utilized for public welfare. I agree that
bulk
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the bulk
 of the governmental finances should be directed to meet basic needs of society, but I
also
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 consider
space
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 exploration as a significant scientific pursuit.
To begin
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, government should spend generously to contribute
good
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well
better
 to the public rather than discovering the unknown. The
space
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 exploration is
highly expansive project
Suggestion
a highly expansive project
the highly expansive project
 that needs huge investment
hence
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, developing countries like us better direct their finances to improve living standards. As we are lacking in basics like clothing, food, education and employment it is the need of government to funnel tax payers money to more down- to- earth projects. Reforms should be introduced which are crucial to the welfare of society
such
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 as free education and economical
health
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 care.
For example
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, Imran khan introduced the
health
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 program in 2011 in which poor people were provided with the
health
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 cards to seek free
health
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 care.
On the other hand
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, acquiring the knowledge of
universe
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the universe
hold
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holds
 a significant importance in fields of sciences. By launching satellites
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
space
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 scientists are able to uncover the remarkable Knowledge about weather and survival conditions on other
space
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 bodies.
This
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 is helpful in one way as we predict
the worse
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the bad
 weather disasters before hand and can make preventions and
furthermore
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,
incase
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in case
 when all the earth resources will deplete and population will exceed the earth capacity we will have a chance to migrate
to an another
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on to another
to on another
 planet with survival
facillities
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.
For instance
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, NASA launched a satellite
on
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of
to
 Mars in 2008 which discovered, the
foot prints
a mark of a foot or shoe on a surface
footprints
 of human survival and along with the presence of gasses essential for human survival
.
Accept space
.
 To conclude,
government
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the government
 on his
first
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 hand should try to provide basic facilities to public and
then
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 pour the money for
space
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 venture as its
second
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 priority.
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