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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life in other planets some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money Addressing problems of public to what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is commonly believed that pouring a lot of the governmental resources to unravel universe is
absolute waste
Suggestion
an absolute waste
 of them,
however
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 they better be utilized for public welfare. I agree that
bulk
Suggestion
the bulk
 of the governmental finances should be directed to meet basic needs of society, but
space
Use synonyms
 exploration
also
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 holds importance.
To begin
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 some argue that expenditure of resources to explore
universe
Suggestion
the universe
 is
total waste
Suggestion
a total waste
 of
them
an instance or single occasion for some event
time
.
However
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, I opine, acquiring the knowledge of
universe
Suggestion
the universe
 hold a significant importance in fields of sciences. By launching satellites
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
space
Use synonyms
 scientists are able to uncover the remarkable Knowledge about weather and survival conditions on other
space
Use synonyms
 bodies.
This
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 is helpful in one way as we predict
the worse
Suggestion
the bad
 weather disasters Beforehand and can make preventions and
furthermore
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, in case when all the earth resources will deplete and population will exceed the earth capacity we will have a chance to migrate
to an another
Suggestion
on to another
to on another
 planet with survival
facillities
Suggestion
. For instance, NASA launched a satellite
on
Suggestion
of
to
 Mars in 2008 which discovered, the
foot prints
a mark of a foot or shoe on a surface
footprints
 of human survival and along with
presence
Suggestion
the presence
 of gasses essential for human survival
.
Accept space
.
 According to
an other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 school of thoughts, government should spend generously to contribute to
public good
Suggestion
the public good
. I agree with
this
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 suggestion because
space
Use synonyms
 exploration is
highly expansive project
Suggestion
a highly expansive project
the highly expansive project
 that needs huge investment
hence
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, developing countries like us better direct their finances to improve living standards. As we are lacking in basics like clothing, food, education and employment it is the need of government to funnel tax payers money to more down- to- earth projects. Reforms should be introduced which are crucial to
welfare
Suggestion
the welfare
 of society
such
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 as free education and economical
health
Use synonyms
 care.
For example
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, Imran khan introduced
health
Use synonyms
 program in 2011 in which poor people were provided with
health
Use synonyms
 cards to seek free
health
Use synonyms
 care. To conclude,
government
Suggestion
the government
 on his
first
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 hand should try to provide basic facilities to public as
this
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 is more significant and
then
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 pour money for
space
Use synonyms
 venture as its
second
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 priority.

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