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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life in other planets some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing problems of public to what extent do you agree or disagree

#government #money #life #planets #people
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It is commonly believed that pouring a lot of the governmental resources to unravel
life
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 on other planets is
absolute waste
Suggestion
an absolute waste
 of them,
however
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, they better be utilized for public welfare. I agree that
bulk
Suggestion
the bulk
 of the governmental finances should be directed to meet basic needs of society, but
space
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 exploration
also
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 holds importance. According to one school of thoughts, the
government
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 should spend more to solve public basic problems rather than exploring
universe
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the universe
. I agree with
this
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 suggestion because we are a developing country and lacking in basics like education, food, shelter and employment.In present
challanges
take exception to
challenges
, it is the need of
government
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 to funnel tax payers money to more down- to- earth projects and provide people their basic necessities. Reforms should be introduced which are crucial to
welfare
Suggestion
the welfare
 of society
such
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 as free education and economical
health
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 care which in turn help public to
eleviate
give a promotion to or assign to a higher position
elevate
alleviate
 their standard of living.
For example
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, Imran
khan
a title given to rulers or other important people in Asian countries
Khan
 recently introduced
health
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 program in in which 2500 poor people are provided with
health
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 cards to seek free
health
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 care and
government
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 is supposed to pay on their behalf
hence
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, providing a benefit to local
prople
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
.
On the other hand
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, some argue that expenditure of resources to explore
life
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 on other planets is
total waste
Suggestion
a total waste
 of
them
an instance or single occasion for some event
time
.
However
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, I opine, acquiring the knowledge of neighbouring planets holds a significant importance. By launching satellites
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
space
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 scientists are able to uncover the remarkable Knowledge about the survival conditions on other
space
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 bodies.
This
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 is helpful in a way that,
incase
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in case
 when all the earth resources will deplete and population will exceed the earth capacity we will have a chance to migrate
to an another
Suggestion
on to another
to on another
 planet if any of them contain suitable surviving habitat. For instance, NASA
send
Suggestion
sends
 a
sattelite
man-made equipment that orbits around the earth or the moon
satellite
 to Mars in order to find is there any
posibility
a future prospect or potential
possibility
 of
life
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. That discovered evidences of
life
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 and
presence
Suggestion
the presence
 of gasses that can support human survival. To conclude,
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government
Suggestion
the government
 on his
first
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 hand should try to provide basic facilities to public as
this
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 is more significant and
then
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 pour money for
space
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 venture as its
second
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 priority.
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