The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion mil be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continuous throughout life.

Nowadays,
money
is a prime driving force in human's
life
and it is very difficult to earn
money
these days because competition is increasing day by day. There is a need to have several careers or ways of earning
money
rather than having a single
career
. Single
career
is becoming an old fashioned
one
and related to
this
,
further
education will be something that continuous throughout
life
. To embark, I believe that for living a luxuries
life
, a person must have several careers or ways of earning
money
because expenditures are on the top in everyday's
life
,
for example
, a person who lives in a big family will not fulfil the needs of every member of the family if he have single
career
or he must have some business to run with his job simultaneously to fulfil the needs and desires of his family,
furthermore
, if we take an example of a farmer, all family member are engaged in
one
business and a part of their earning distributes among all family members so they do not live a luxuries
life
by having a single business. People are encouraged for education these days and
further
education will be continuous throughout
life
. Some people think they get an employment if they have several degrees so they do not stop
study
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studying
and continuous it with their jobs to get high income jobs.
However
, some people think
one
should focus on
single
Suggestion
a single career
career
to earn
money
and do not divert their mind and they think
one
should make
one
particular aim by which they earn more
money but
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money, but
I disagree with them because it is not a time of single
career
and they get only limited
money
by
this
. To sum up, a person should go for a several ways of earning
money
because consumerism is reached at its highest peak and
money
is the only thing which
fulfil
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fulfils
everyone's desire.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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