In many countries around the world, shopping has turned into a form of entertainment rather than a way of getting what people need. Discuss the reason for this trend. Is it a positive or negative development.

Today
shopping is more of an impulsive
purchase
rather than its necessity. Since there is an increase in shopping malls around the globe shopping has become easier as everything is available under one roof.
This
essay will discuss why shopping is considered as an entertainment
today
and in my opinion, I feel there are more negative aspects
to
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of
this
trend than positive. Earlier people used to do shopping for fulfilling their basic requirements, but
today
it is seen as a leisure activity.
Today people
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Today, people
purchase
products that are not essential for them. The change in
this
trend of shopping is because
today
's generation
earns
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will earn
more than earlier people.
Therefore
, their disposable income is higher.
Moreover
,
today
there are myriad of financial schemes
such
as EMI, credit card and so
on which
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on, which
makes purchasing any value of goods easy.
For example
, if an individual wants to
shop
transport commercially
ship
a mobile, he can
purchase
it even if he has no money to pay for it immediately.
Such
purchases were not possible during
earlier
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the early
days.
Therefore
, shopping at ease is treated as an entertainment for people. Even though people have more income
today
and do more shopping there are situations where people buy products which are unnecessary. Due to
this
impulsive
purchase
using credit
facilities many
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facilities, many
individuals go under financial crisis.
For example
, in a recent survey, it was found that 80% of youngsters borrowed loans from banks to
purchase
products that are beyond the capacity and became financial defaulters.
Today
youngsters do shopping on seeing what others own and in order to maintain the same status they do unwanted shopping. To conclude, shopping can be considered as an entertainment if there is a need for the product and can maintain financial discipline.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

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  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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