Some people believe that aim of university education is to help graduates to get better jobs.other believe there are wider benefits of university education for bith indivisuals and society .discuss views and give your opinion.

Majority
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The majority
of the pupils are striving for higher qualifications. It is often argued that,
sole purpose
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the sole purpose
of university education is to pursue a good
job
whilst,
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
disagree, and think that, having a professional degree is beneficial to both individual and society. I strongly concur with
this
notion that, the university helps in individual and social wellbeing. On one hand, people believe that, getting higher education is the key to secure
best
Suggestion
better jobs
better job
a better job
job
. Because we are surviving in a competitive world, where competency of a person is judged on
basis
Suggestion
the basis
of his degree rather than other qualities.
However
, I disagree with
this
opinion as, certainty to get a particular
job
not only depends upon
knowledge but
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knowledge, but
also
require technical skill and good previous experience in the specific field.
For instance
,
company
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a company
companies
the company
dealing with information and technology will prefer to enrol a candidate who had been working in the same field for
long time
Suggestion
a long time
, rather than a person who had recently got graduated.
On the other hand
, some argue that, having a professional degree contribute to personal and social welfare. I too agree with
this
,
firstly
,
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,
in big institutes one
have
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has
to interact with so many different personalities,
in addition
, they have to overcome so many challenges
such
as financial and educational stresses which give him an opportunity to grow as a person.
Such
a groomed individual in turn
serve
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serves
the nation and elevates the economy of the country.
For instance
, India is well known for best hepatic
surgeons all
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surgeons, all
over the Asia,
hence
people across the
countries visit
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countries, visit
them for
liver
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live
surgeries and transplant
,
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,
in
this
way they earn individually and
also
add a lot to the country’s reserves. In conclusion, higher education not solely aim for perfect
job
opportunities,
however
, it is
also
helpful for people and country in order to built finances.
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