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Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a long standing debate regarding the role of the men and women in our society and, some are advocates of differentiating these duties on the basis of diverse qualities possessed by both. I personally believe that recognizing these qualities, which encourage men to perform intense jobs, requiring them to
work
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 in a harsh weather and women to perform and excel in a field which is more suitable for their respective nature, can be more fruitful than trying to achieve goals which are not best suited for their natural tendencies. Men have always been known to be the breadwinners
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of
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 the family, and they have always been portrayed as
the stronger
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the strongest
 part of the family.
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a type of
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 involving heavy loads, harsh working conditions and demanding stamina to tolerate the extra efforts, is considered to be better suited for men.
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, the construction
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, the operation of heavy machinery and the maintenance of different civil structures are few areas where men can perform a better job because of their natural capabilities.
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, it would be very odd and a difficult job for a lady to perform the maintenance of a sewerage
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system, while it
 is considered to be a normal job for a man.
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, women are always known to be the queens of their home and they beautify things around them in
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 a way that even if they want to, men can never receive the same level of praise for their
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, because of a little to
none presence
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the none presence
 of the aesthetic sense in them.
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, the performance of women in a type of
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 involving art, décor, interior designing and fashion designing
would always be exemplary and their natural abilities enable
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would exemplary and their natural abilities always enable
would always be exemplary and their natural abilities enable
 them to outclass men in these fields. As an example, the industry of fashion designing is filled with a number of successful women who reached the epitome of success only because of the abilities incurred naturally in them. To conclude, I am in complete agreement that the professions opted by men and women according to their inbuilt characteristics, will enable them to succeed and
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, they should put their utmost efforts to make a name for themselves in their relevant fields.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • inherent qualities
  • social dynamics
  • merit-based selection
  • advancements in technology
  • levelled the playing field
  • gender stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • physical differences
  • workplace
  • evolving
  • traditional view
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