Some people think governments are responsible for peoples health, others believe its an indiviuduals responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

    Healthcare remains a very crucial part of out basic amenities. The topic of whether or not people or the government should be held accountable for issues
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,  remains very controversial. In my opinion, the government should be solely in charge of the
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of its citizens at all times.     On one hand,
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care as well as the funding for the research into cures and vaccines are expensive. Private firms and singular entities cannot bear the burden alone.
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, the cost of hospital admissions, investigations and medications would cripple the finances of the individual without
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the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
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aid and policies. All fingers are not equal,
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, the government plays a huge role by providing subsidized care to patients in its publicly funded facilities. People cannot afford to pay for most of the services because of financial constraints. 
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, data from a survey carried out by the World
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in Nigeria
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in 2013, revealed that many Nigerians depend entirely on the presidency to access excellent medical care.     
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, people are the masters of their bodies. Most diseases in the world today are preventable,
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, they are mostly caused by poor lifestyle choices. Individuals should inculcate the habit of proper diet, exercise and regular medical checkups to keep fit and
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  to detect illnesses in the early stages.    In conclusion, while some are of the opinion that governments should be responsible for
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, others are of the school of thought that it rests on the individual. I believe that it is the  responsibility of the state to cater for the
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of all its nationals.

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