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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?

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Most of people deal with that the attractive
side
 of big
city
life
 is sufficient to
contiune
continue a certain state, condition, or activity
continue
contain
 with
invidual
a human being
individual
life
.
However
, the
city
bring
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brings
 along various problem beneath dark of
side
 which reveals over population, traffic, pollution, havoc on natural
life
, low food quality and high
life
 expenses. In my
opanion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
opening
 the govern support the people for immigrating to rural areas.
First significant problem
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The first significant problem
 is over population. It has
effect
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an effect
 on traffic
,
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,
 loud, and
.
Accept space
.
Initially
, the
crowden
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crowd en
 road and
strees
look at with fixed eyes
stares
stores
streets
 directly effect on
vast majority
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the vast majority
 of
city
 residents.
On the other hand
, most of people are passing time on the road which
challange
take exception to
challenge
 to arrive one point to another.
Moreover
, the traffic
could be make
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could make
 loud in the
city
expect
take exception to
except
 at nights. Unfortunately, some big cities is not
slept
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sleeping
on
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at
 night, so
,
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,
 the sound is never
end
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finished
finish
this areas
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this area
these areas
. The
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 issue is pollution. The
manufactoring
a business engaged in manufacturing some product
manufacturer
manufacturing
 builds establish on
edge
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the edge
 of the
city
 which they produce air pollution. Citizen
never stop
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never stops
produce
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producing
 the chemical via their cars, or individual usage. The
life
 of
city
destroy
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destroys
 to closer natural
life
 which is animal and flora.
Thus
, the quality of
healty
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
 food unearth new medical problems
such
 as cancer,
asthm
respiratory disorder characterized by wheezing; usually of allergic origin
asthma
.
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.
the
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The
last
 problem is
high
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higher
 taxes and
expencess
amounts paid for goods and services that may be currently tax deductible (as opposed to capital expenditures)
expenses
. In the big
city
 people consume a lot of time during work.
Although
 citizen
may be earn
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may earn
 much money than rural
side
, the expenses drain the money
proportianolly
to a proportionate degree
proportionally
 as earned. So, it is a good idea for choosing to live in
out
beyond the boundary of; external to
outside
side
 of cities.
In
contrast of
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contrast, of
 all, the
city
give
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gives
 to people a lot of facilities
such
 as; medical, schools, museum or different social
activites
any specific behavior
activities
. But, the thing is, main services supply is the important immigration the people
to
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in
villages
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the villages
. In short, if the
govern
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governing
 improve quality of services, people
may be change
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may change
 their
environmet
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
. The citizen could be prefer small town while finding
opportunities rural areas
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opportunities in rural areas
 as equal as in
city
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the city
a city
cities
...
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