The world is witnessing increase in number data. Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. how does competitiveness affect individual is it positive or negative?

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a positive attitude

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The world is witnessing increase in number data. Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. how does competitiveness affect individual is it positive or negative?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

There have been major advances in technology over recent decades and this has led to significant improvements in people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Spending on advanced computer systems by authorities is very beneficial for development but many oppose this trend. do you agree or disagree.

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

The tabel below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

In many countries, it is now illegal to advertise alcohol. Do you agree or disagree?