The world is witnessing increase in number data. Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. how does competitiveness affect individual is it positive or negative?

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modern day, the number of criminal activity

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significantly. Few believed in

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used to form the superlative

most

societies have people, who have competitiveness and it is

positive atitude

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a positive attitude

positive attitude

Eventhough

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Even though

it is

good impact

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a good impact

personally

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personality

also

some negative effects are higher. Both of things

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are deeply introducing

are deeply introduce

are deeply introduced

further

paragraphs.

To begin

with, there is no doubt for competitiveness

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introduces an alternative

affected positively in human. Because of competition, people are

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present, their

present their

present there

hidden abilities in front of the world

for

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beat their competitors and

also

learn many of things

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from

it. Other things is that people are trying to push their limits

such

as in the exam time students read for

long night

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a long night

because of cracking their exam.

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is good

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a distinct feature or element in a problem

aspect

aspects

and by

this

they are aware of

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of them or themselves

their

own energy. Beside

this

competitiveness is

also

very bad impact on the people sometime. People

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are trying

have tried

try

to defend their race in any kind of situation.

and

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And

they try to some

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a route shorter than the usual one

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because of

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of them or themselves

their

atitude

a complex mental state involving beliefs and feelings and values and dispositions to act in certain ways

attitude

altitude

of clearing competition. And do some

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(criminal law) an act punishable by law; usually considered an evil act

crime

because they have beat their

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datacenter

decanters

dissenters

Such

as nowadays in the news spread in the tv. That exam paper leaked scam or business man killed by his brother. To conclude,

however competition

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however, competition

good thing

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a good thing

for people,

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on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always

sometimes

also

has negative impact which is not forgettable.

some

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Some

people take it very positively, whilst other human

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takes

part some illegal activity because of beaten race.

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The world is witnessing increase in number data. Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. how does competitiveness affect individual is it positive or negative?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

As technology advances, travelling to space is likely to become an option for holidaymakers in the future. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages.

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Some old people today struggle with the use of modern technologies such as smart phones and computers. What is the cause of this, and what are some possible solutions? cause : Lack of knowledge Solutions : Guided by their kids and Other places

Some people think that the goverment should strictly control the supply of fresh water, as it is a limited resource , while others it should not be regulated. Discuss both the sides and give your opinion