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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome?

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Different countries face different challenges considering their
population
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, development and growth levels and other aspects. The challenges that we are facing in today’s scenario will be enhanced in future if not given proper attention. India will be facing a
lot
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 of all challenges in the
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, pollution, unemployment, uncleanliness and poverty. India is the 2nd largest
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 in the world which in a way is a root cause
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of
 several other major problems. With increasing competition in
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the professional world
 and unstoppable
population
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 in the country, unemployment will be at its peak in future. Another challenge would be
uncleanliness
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an uncleanliness
 for which India currently is facing a
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 of criticism. In order to overcome these problems,
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 it is important to make strict laws to control the
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 of the country by restricting the number of children a family can have. For unemployment issue, we need to make changes in our
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 system. It is everyone’ right to get
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education
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an education
 and a
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 of young children in our country doesn’t get
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 right because of the high fees in schools. We need to make revised changes in our
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 system so that everyone can get equal opportunity to study and succeed in life and
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 it will reduce poverty for which India is known for. Cleanliness can be achieved
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by
 a change
in mind-set of people
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mindset of people
in mindset of people
 and making strict laws and regulations. India has a
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of potential to overcome
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potential to overcome
 the hurdles that it may face in the
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proper system
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a proper system
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education
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educate
educating
 the
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 of the nation.
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