Computers are becoming an essential part of school lessons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion

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Advancement of technology
such
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as gaining assess to the internet
are becoming
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is becoming
important aspect
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an important aspect
in modern day
school
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learning.
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essay will suggest that
this
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enlarge their scope of learning is one of the most
advantage
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advantages
.
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However losing
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However, losing
focus can occur their by diverting away from academic purposes. In my opinion exposure to new academic tools like computers helps students in reaching their academic potential.
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with, availability and
assessbility
the quality of being at hand when needed
accessibility
of computers in schools
helps
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help
in fast delivery of lectures, its
also
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widening the intellect of student on different courses, ranging from topics to topics thereby covering large within
limited period
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a limited period
. It
aslo
in addition
also
makes teaching interesting rather than the ritual way of blackboard learning. Assignments can be easily
assign
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assigned
to work on and
this
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can be done without much stress as many educational
site
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sites
are online.
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goggle are being
use
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used
in different form educational work which are has
being
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
helpful in finding of new words and topics at
faster rate
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a faster rate
. Despite the advantages, many students tend to ~loses~ *lose* focus on their
useage
the act of using
usage
usages
of browsing thereby engaging in games, watching of films,
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some practice what they saw like using of hard drugs at
younger age
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a younger age
younger ages
.
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makes their interest in learning depreciated
thus
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reducing drive to go for lectures.
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a research conducted at Aro psychiatric hospitals on juvenile delinquency found that 90% of those children learn about hard drugs on the internet since
their
in or at that place
there
is no restrictions on the net. In my opinion, technological tools
helps
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help
in achieving
academical goal
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the academical goal
academical goals
an academical goal
at a higher
rate
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rate, thus
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self actualization
are being acquired
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is being acquired
.
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work can be done at a confidence zone and pupils have the opportunity of reading ahead of the class given them more knowledge on the before being taught.
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instance at
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instance, at
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secondary
school
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student are given opportunity to operate the
school
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computer
also
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98% of them
has
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have
taptops
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tap tops
at
home which
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home, which
makes them to attain the best
school
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in just recently concluded
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competition. To sum up
,
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assessing to the net can be advantageous as it
help
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helps
in achieving academic
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peak, however
however
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it should be encouraged to be used under adult supervision.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Edutainment
  • Multimedia resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Ergonomic hazards
  • Cognitive overload
  • Technological proficiency
  • Blended learning environments
  • Instructional technology
  • Adaptive software
  • Screen time management
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