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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It seems to be
a
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an
increasily
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spreadwide
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spread wide
 concern that the
internet
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 and the
information
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 that it brings have been changing the
people
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peoples'
 lives.
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, that can bring both, good
thing but
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thing, but
also
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 bad things for our
currently
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current
 days.
Nowaday
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Nowadays
, people run in their
lives
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lives, such
such
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 as with study, working, and trying to
achive
to gain with effort
achieve
 what the society stand as a standard.
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, we deeply know that teenager
have
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has
 the "must" thinking
aboult
(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
about
 to buy the most recently
cellphone
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cell phone
avalible
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
 in the trades. We
also
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 can observe
a
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an
incriasing
becoming greater or larger
increasing
 hunt for social "likes" through the social
midia
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
avalible
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
in
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on
 the
internet
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. People that try to flee
of
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from
this
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usualy
under normal conditions
usually
usual
 realise with more ease the damage that
our
plural of "I"
we
 currently days give for us. Many
cientists
a person with advanced knowledge of one or more sciences
scientists
contests
 stand that we never have
before so
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before, so
 much mental
helth
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
heath
 issues, and
many
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much
 of
that is
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 for the overdose of the
information
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 that we have access every day,
researchs
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
tell
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tells
 us that the
infomation
a message received and understood
information
 that we have in one day today is the same amount that one king of the 18
centrury
a period of 100 years
century
 had in one year.
One
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On
 another
had
place into the hands or custody of
hand
, today the
internet
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give
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gives
 to us the
oportunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
opportunities
 and knowledge
for
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in
we
of or belonging to us
our
 search for a better style live,
for
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instance we
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instance, we
 can research about how to lose our shame, or how to make a correct
fisical
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
 exercise, and even how to speak another
lenguage
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
language
, or make a cake.
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, the
internet
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 can bring us near to our parents that are living
in
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on
 the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 side
to
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of
in
 the world, through video chats we can speak
wirh
expresses the means used
with
 them and see them in real time. In a nutshell, we know that the pressure of our community in the present day
is not ease
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does not ease
 to deal with, and the increased access to
information
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 makes it harder to keep in
a
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an
avarege
approximating the statistical norm or average or expected value
average
 of the "social level". But it
is depend
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depends
of
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on
 us to use
this
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information
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 and tool (
internet
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) for our good or not, we need to have balance and good sense.
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