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University should enrol equal numbers of male and female students in all subjects. Do you agree or disagree?

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Tertiary education is very important today for a nation that desires to grow in various fields, so, according to many,
university
 should allocate equal quotas for male and female applicants. In my view, I consider that students should be admitted based on merit as
this
 would in the long run develop
society
 maximally by producing skilled and knowledgeable graduates. An important point to consider, why universities must not admit equal numbers of male and female students is that,
this
 would be discriminatory.
For instance
, if you have around 70% of males applying for
university
 admission and there is a policy to take in same quota for male and female, a good proportion of male
applicant
Suggestion
applicants
 would be deprived of higher education.
Hence
, admission into universities should be on merit as
this
 would prevent prejudice against applicants. A
second
 reason to examine is that, having equal
university
 quotas for male and female students would not benefit
society
.
For example
, admitting students based on quota would exclude a large proportion of qualified applicants.
Consequently
,
this
 would impact negatively on a nation's economy as less qualified graduates would be produced by universities.
Furthermore
, the effect on
society
 would be devastating as there would be a rise in the numbers of restive young adults thereby leading to an increase in crime rate. In conclusion, in as much as
university
 education is of utmost importance to a nation's growth, I believe that qualified candidates should be offered
university
 admission, rather than admitting based on equal quotas, as
this
 would eventually provide well skilled and knowledgeable graduates that would contribute positively to
society
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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