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Successful companies use advertisement to make more sales. What can make an advertisement very effective? Do you think this is a bad thing or a good thing for the society?

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In the contemporary era, marketing is the backbone of any business. Companies are spending millions on their product promotions. In
this
 essay, we will discuss the causative factors behind an effective advertisement and its positive and negative impacts on society. Nowadays, an average company spends 20 to 30% of their revenue
in
Suggestion
on
 marketing. Creative content agencies are hired to attract customers. Be it a print media or TV commercials, these consultancies don't lose a chance anywhere to attract consumers. Even if we don't concentrate on these ads, the product picture gets saved in our subconscious minds.
For instance
, the jerseys of sports players are full of advertisements. When we go to the market to buy anything, the product name will click immediately because
that is
 saved somewhere in the back of our minds.
However
,
this
 hypothesis
is challenging
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are challenged
are challenging
 to test. A right-minded advertisement leaves a positive impact on society. We get to know the new products in the market, and we can compare and buy merchandise on our choice. Unethical practices of advertisement leave a negative impact on society.
For instance
, all the soft drink ads only advertise about the taste of the drink. They will never mention the significant amount of sugar content in the drink. Another example is the tobacco or
cigarettes
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cigarette
 ads which show a hero smoking in style and that
consequently
 leaves a terrible mark on the youngsters. Having weighed up all the positive and negative factors, I am
firm
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firmly
 of the view that government should come up with some norms to regulate the marketing industry and ban the marketing of the products which are bad for the masses.
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