You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

this

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letter to discuss some fundamental but practical points regarding the

seminar

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. I am Behnam, from Iran, and interested in participating

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the

seminar

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willingly

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apply

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. There are

few

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a few

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points that I like you to provide me

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with more

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information

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about.

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Since I am coming from abroad as a foreigner, I would like to know where I can find information regarding the accommodation during my stay. the other things which are coming to my mind are as

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: a. Dates of the program, because I couldn`t find enough information about the dates exactly. b. What types of programs do you offer in the

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? I would like to have a clear viewpoint of the programs and decide in advance about participation in

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program, presentation or certificate

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apply

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. I

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really

appreciating

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it if

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you

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give me comprehensive details about it. c. And

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and I suppose the most important and

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is the fees. I need to know the

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structure to

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divide

decide

and set my budget for

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seminar

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the end, I

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apply

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really

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your precious time and effort

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in reading

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my letter and possible

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communication. Thanks so much in advance. Looking Forward to Hearing from You Soon Truly Yours Behnam Behforouz

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

209 words

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