some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The role of a
school
and the parents in raising well mannered individuals of a
scoiety
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
is debatable.Some people
believ
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
that it is the prime
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
responsibilities
of
parent
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the parent
parents
a parent
. Others,
however
, opine that the
school
is
greather
greater in size or importance or degree
greater
shareholder of
this
task. In my opinion, they both share an equal and important responsibility to accomplish
this
goal.
To begin
with, it is argued by many that home is the
first
school
and the parents are the primary
instructers
a person whose occupation is teaching
instructors
instructor
. Most of the time children spend with in their childhood is with their parents
,
Accept space
,
they mimic their actions and
hence
, they learn what they see adults behaving like. By taking advantage of
this
crucial learning time span of youngster lives, if adults can play role model for them, they can teach good habits, empathy, socialism and care in young ones
that is
essence
Suggestion
the essence
of an ideal society.
For instance
, The Time
repoted
made known or told about; especially presented in a formal account
reported
that scientific research has revealed, childhood experiences and events have lasting impact on
individuals personality
Suggestion
the individual's personality
individual's personality
an individual's personality
individual personality
.
On the other hand
,
school
is an ideal place to make a pupil very social according to many. Because, the
school
presents a dynamic and versatile environment of learning and
intercatig
with
Suggestion
to
the people of
varried
characterized by variety
varied
background
Suggestion
backgrounds
,
also
it serves as a true role model of a dynamic society on a small scale.
Moreover
,
opportunity
Suggestion
the opportunity
is given to take part in the charity work which seeds morality,
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
and love for their surroundings.
For example
, In Japan, free community services are the integral part of their study course, which has made the Japan most sociable country in the world. In my opinion,
instead
of being devided on
Suggestion
being divided on
of being divided on
of being decided on
this
preliminary issue of upbringing
nobel
impressive in appearance
noble
people of the futuristic
humanly
Suggestion
humanitarian
human
humane
humanities
humanist
community, the parents and the schools are obliged to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their duties equally and
staisfactorily
in a satisfactory manner
satisfactorily
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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