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Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why?

#students #work #university #study
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Certainly it’s a better option for any student to
work
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 before their tertiary education starts. Gaining a
work
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experience
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 is always helpful for anyone to excel and boost their career and scoring good grades in studies as well, so here are some examples and reasons to choose
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 choice.
Firstly
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, any student who is having a
job
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 will definitely get well versed with office culture of commitment towards allotted assignments which not only support them in
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job
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the job
 but
also
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 during University studies they will be more effective learners.For an instance,
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a pupil
pupils
the pupil
 who worked and
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 join their higher studies are well synchronized
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,
they keep up with their studies and try to push their limits to broaden their horizons.
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, prior
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experience
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 is an added advantage for any student along with their academic qualification to grab a
job
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.
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, any
employer
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employer's
 belief in employees’ hands on
experience
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 more than its academic qualification employers’ mindset is that these kind of employees can prove themselves better in delivering their
job
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 commitments.
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, students who had previous
work
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experience
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 knew
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the value
 of money
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 quality will help them to get selected from the pool of
job
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 eligible graduates because as per employers these graduates operates with ownership in an organization and can be a sustainable, valuable asset to any employer. To summarize, working before university education is beneficial for students in both
ways either
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ways, either
 excelling in academics or having a
job
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 opportunity.
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 will increase their confidence level and help them out in future.
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