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Robotics is necessary for future human development.But it has both advantages and disadvantages.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#robotics #future #development
In the recent years
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with the advent and increase in the usage of
technology especially
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technology, especially
 in the field of robotics
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people are completely
relaying
have confidence or faith in
relying
 on it for various purposes.Many believe that the field of robotics is our future and would bring development
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whereas
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few others are of the opinion that one shouldn’t completely
relay
have confidence or faith in
rely
 on it. Robotics is our future. With the help of robotics and artificial
intelligence human
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intelligence, human
 race can achieve unforeseen feats.Robots can help in reducing
human work load
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the human work load
 in various fields like in
calucukations
the procedure of calculating; determining something by mathematical or logical methods
calculations
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household work
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military force etc.Their
usuagein
 military would prevent human loss.They are way faster in
comparision
the act of examining resemblances
comparison
compression
 to humans and
therefore
 can be of utmost importance in calculations which would save time and energy.
This
 time can be used in something more fruitful. As a coin has two sides
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so does
this
 topic.Encouraging robots to work in various fields would mean less employment to human workers.
This
 would push a lot of
population
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the population
 towards unemployment and poverty.
This
 is turn would increase a country’s load of liable people.
Also
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there is always a danger that artificial intelligence may overpower the natural human intelligence and system.
Thus
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in my opinion
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encouraging the field of robotics is definitely
worthwhile but
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worthwhile, but
 at the same time precautions must be taken to prevent its overuse as it may be detrimental to the society.
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