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Smart devices have put all of the world's information at our fingertips. What are the drawbacks of this development?

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The advent of technology has brought about easy access to any
information
 due to the availability of technologically driven devices
such
 as smart phones.
Inspite
Suggestion
In spite
 of
this
 development, there are a number of demerits
this
 has brought which include, people having a boring social life as well as becoming practically lazy. In
this
 essay, the disadvantages associated with smart devices would be discussed. Having an uninterrupted access to diverse
information
 on the
internet
 through technologically powered gadgets has serious disadvantages.
Firstly
, it has brought about people having a boring lifestyle.
For example
, individuals no longer socialize with friends and family
because, they spend
Suggestion
, because they spend
 ample time on the
internet
.
Consequently
, people now have a stereotyped pattern of living, only concerned about what
information
 they have to gather from the
internet
, resulting in a boring social life for individuals. A
second
 drawback associated with the use of smart devices is that, it makes people practically lazy.
For instance
, consider a student who has a research topic to work on and has to gather
information
 regarding
this
 research project, the student no longer sees the need to visit the library because, he believes all the
information
 concerning the topic is at his fingertips.
Hence
, students no longer apply themselves to the use of the library and
therefore
, less informed of important
information
 about
history
Suggestion
the history
.
Furthermore
,
this
 development makes students physically and mentally lazy. In conclusion, despite smart gadgets helping people get
information
 from the
internet
 easily, it has serious disadvantages, as people have condemned themselves to a boring lifestyle as well as becoming physically and mentally lazy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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