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Young people in the modern world seem to have more power and influence than any previous young generation. Why is this the case? What impact does this have on the relationship between old and young people?

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While reading newspapers and surfing on the internet, one can often come across stories, which are about the success of young people. In the modern world, young people seem to have more power and influence than any previous young generation. The following questions can arise regarding
this
 statement. Why is
this
 case and what are its consequences? In my opinion, the main reason for young people's power and influence is the improvement of information technology. Since children grow up surrounded by gadgets, they can use them more effectively. Digital technology connects the majority of earth's population, resulting in faster information spreading. Previous young generations had
also
 great and innovative ideas, but the lack of communication channels made it impossible for them to
advertize
call attention to
advertise
 the ideas globally.
In addition
, the internet makes it possible for everyone to look up information about an incredibly wide range of topics, providing the best level of education for poorer people as well. The impact of the discussed phenomenon
on
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of
 the relationship between old and young people is significant. Old people can realize that in some aspects, they are
outperformed
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outperforming
, and
therefore
 they can be more critical and sceptical when facing ideas and inventions of young people.
In addition
, the increased number of teenagers who are millionaire can lead even to
protests
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protest
 against the new generation. All in all, I think both old and young people should take action in order to make their relationship better. Old people have to realize that the power and influence of
the young
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the younger
 generation
comes
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come
 with a large number of benefits, while young people should be more empathic when it comes to the interaction with old people.
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