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Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people feel that
paparazzi
Suggestion
the paparazzi
 should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe
this
 is just the price of
fame
. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Whether it is Hollywood or any country's film industry, people are fascinated about the
life
 of celebrities. On one hand, we have people who believe that the personal
life
 of celebrities is the cost of their fan following and on the contrast some people think invading their daily
life
 is wrong. In
this
 essay we will discuss both view and state my opinion that the personal
life
 of anyone should not be exposed without the individual permission.
Firstly
, some of the celebrities for increasing their
fame
, do a publicity stunt by releasing their lifestyle into social media.
As a result
, people who follow these blog posts
in
Suggestion
on
 the internet feel it’s their popularity and no harm in exposing these photos
to
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in
 public.
For Instance
, a survey conducted by New York Times found that about five percent of celebrities have increased their
fame
 by releasing their party or
life
events
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event
 picture.
On the other hand
, some think that no way an individual
life
 can be exposed
into
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in
 public without his permission. Photographers who want to gain popularity overnight take pictures of the private
life
 of celebrity persons. As a consequence,
this
 leads to spread of false news or
rumors
gossip (usually a mixture of truth and untruth) passed around by word of mouth
rumours
 and may affect the celebrity family
life
.
For example
, in Bollywood the year of 1990 there were morphed images of film star Mr. Dutt which were circulated in social media. Due to
this
 his father had a heart stroke and expired, which was an unforgettable loss in his
life
. In conclusion,
this
 essay discussed why people think that celebrities'
life
 is a price of
fame
 and illustrated my opinion that celebrities are
also
 one of among the people in society who require their privacy of personal
life
.
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