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*With recent developments in technology like e-books, some people feel that printed media like books, newspapers, and magazines will soon be a thing of the past. Others feel that these form of media will never disappear. What is your opinion?*

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There is no doubt, that the speedy development of technology is increasing day-to-day. Some mortals believe that traditional methods of acquiring ideas
such
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 as newspaper and magazines
will sooner or later be eradicate
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will sooner or later be eradicated
will sooner or later be eradicate
. While, some opine that it is impossible to abolish the old method of passing
information
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. In my opinion, I agree that electronic media is very efficient and faster, but printed media will never vanish out of existence completely.
To begin
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 with,
majority
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the majority
 of people spend their endless time in front of a computer which is very convenient and durable in circulating
information
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.
For instance
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 the recent bomb blast at Sri Lanka church, Killing more than dozens of people was
first
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broadcasted
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broadcast
in
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on
 the radio and television, before it was printed
on
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in
 a newspaper. E-books are not only portable and accessible, but
also
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 the Price online materials are cheap and affordable.
In addition
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, printed books
serves
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serve
 as an entity which can be pass to friend and family members. In which people
sees
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see
 as a valuable gift.
For example
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, a preacher who uses l pad to preach in some African countries may be
view
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viewed
viewable
 as being
pride
address a deity, a prophet, a saint or an object of worship; say a prayer
prayed
 and not totally broken. In my opinion,
although
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 ebook is very effective and handy, the procurement of
information
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 is very convenient for most people. Electronic reference can be share through the internet. There are several websites which
information
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 can be updated. Despite all these numerous advantages of conventional books, I still believe that traditional books can never be out of circulation. In conclusion, technology advances
such
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 as E-books Amazon Kindle, are spreading in a very high speed and will definitely continue to provide us with comfort and multiple functions, but I believe that
printed word
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the printed word
 will never vanish from our bookshelf entirely.
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