IN RECENT YEARS, MANY SMALL SHOPS HAVE CLOSED BECAUSE CUSTOMERS TRAVEL TO LARGE SHOPPING CENTRES OR MALLS TO DO THEIR SHOPPING. IS THIS A POSITIVE OF A NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT?

Recently, community shops have had to close because buyers now go to big supermarkets to purchase their goods. I see
this
trend as being detrimental to the growth of the local stores. There is a reason why community stores exist-to serve as a point of purchase of
daily needs
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the daily needs
by
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of
residents. Where there is a preference for big malls, the smaller shopping centres will be forced to downsize and go out of business.
Consequently
, shoppers are at a higher risk if they have to travel to buy the very basic items that can easily be provided by the nearest retail outlet. One clear example of these risks
include
Suggestion
includes
theft, robbery, kidnapping to name a few. An illustration is the recent increase in attacks on road
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
passing through the Benin-Ore expressway. These
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
travels
have become easy targets for armed robbers and kidnappers who have stationed their den in forests along
this
road.
Although
shoppers prefer to travel for their groceries because the big supermarkets offer more variety of products.
For instance
, I prefer to buy my phones and Laptops in big malls where I can compare different products and make decisions based on their varying features despite the risk involved. In sum,
this
new trend poses a threat to all parties involved.
Firstly
, is the shop owners who are forced out of business, and
secondly
the buyers who are at a higher risk of being kidnapped, and
lastly
the cities, (where the larger stores are situated) because there will be an increase in congestion and pollution as the trend continues.
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